Thursday, September 23, 2010

September Breeze

The wind across my nostrils
blows the fading sense of summer
the sweet and melancholy
air of moments gold and light which
keeps the night at bay.

A tickle of my mem’ry
calls the fleeting scents of summer
with resignation tender
thoughts of coming autumn tumble
‘cross the shortened day.

(I'm no poet. Please feel free to improve upon or add to it in the comments section!)

5 comments:

kenju said...

Not bad, but the word nostrils lacks any air of poetry to me....LOL

Tony Gasbarro said...

kenju-- Me, too, but I couldn't think of another word that fits. Feel free to tinker with it!

kenju said...

"nares?", but that sounds stilted.

Tony Gasbarro said...

I also thought about "nares," but I think of that more as bird nomenclature.

tiff said...

Gentle breeze moves softly past

try that for a first line - seven syllables and all!